The Elements House

A gap in the woods.
See the house through the cordon of trees.
Hear the wind chimes. Crows.
Black dog scraping at the back door.
Left to the elements,
the house lies in state-
a mouldering woodland creature,
demonstrating each stage of death.
Sinew stretched to its limits,
the roof folds.
The house ticks.
Wires run like poisoned veins.
Voices course.
If there is a face
at the blasted windows,
it is difficult to tell.

The way the house is
angers the bored children,
cycling this far to fling stones.
A girl sits up in her bed,
sees the window shiver inwards,
her room reduce to broken dolls,
leaf-sump, warped boards.
A water rat looks up from its feeding.
A growl starts in the dog’s throat.
Whatever passes through the leaves
urges the children to retrieve bikes,
scrape shins on pedals.
No one speaks.
Hurry home but never outrun the feeling.
The girl turns
from the crow-gone glass.
Someone calls her downstairs.
The dog is let in.
The elements house sighs.

Published in 'The Manchester Review'


Comments

Clarice Hare's picture
Very creepy, great imagery! I particularly like “wires run like poisoned veins” and “her room reduce to broken dolls”—the idea of a little-girl ghost waking up again and again, never knowing she’s dead, and seeing her memory of her house replaced by the ruin it’s become is genuinely sad and disturbing. The one line I would change is “The way the house is”, which seems a bit flat compared to the rest of the poem. I would go for something like “The house’s blindness”, “The house’s decrepit menace”, “The reproachful loom of the wreck”, etc.—just something to fit in with the vividness and specificity everywhere else. But that’s assuming that one flat line is not an intentional choice, which it might be!

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